Wednesday, September 17, 2008
I WaNt TO AsK ShiRLey RaiNEs!!!
Question: You seem to have mastered the field of education. As far as a time span, how did you go about completing all three degrees and life or was it three degrees and life at the same time?
NEW YORK TIMES
Abortion issue again Dividing Catholic Church
By DAVID D. KIRKPATRICK
Published: September 16, 2008
LEAD: SCRANTON, Pa. — Until recently, Matthew Figured, a Sunday school teacher at the Holy Rosary Roman Catholic Church here, could not decide which candidate to vote for in the presidential election.
Critique: I like this lead. The title already tells us what the story is about, and the information found in the first lead allows us to become more personal with an issue because it includes a specific person but does not forget to mention the fact this is an essential part of the upcoming presidential election. This lead makes one want to ask the question of maybe who he or she should vote for because it introduces information about different politicians and their beliefs on abortion. One can really follow this article well because of the lead. As the story goes on, one thing after another just falls in place.
New York Times
Crews From 31 States in Texas to Restore Power
By JAMES C. MCKINLEY JR
Published: September 16, 2008
LEAD: HOUSTON — An army of line crews from 31 states has converged on eastern Texas to help deal with the largest power failure in this large state’s history.
Critique: This lead is definitely a hard lead because the way it begins. Its exciting! I like it very much! This is a lead that I could read and hear in my head at the same time which makes the story that much more interesting. It uses the noun army which refers to a large organized group on a mission. This just makes the reader want to know more. The small bit of important information placed in this lead is impactful. It almost makes me feel as though I’m a part of what is going on. Stories like this one are definitely not something that your average person might want to be a part of, but I really find it interesting how something so massive can occur and the rest of the world almost misses it if it weren’t for the news. I want to be there!!!
New York Times
States Aim to Cut Gases by Making Polluters Pay
By FELICITY BARRINGER and KATE GALBRAITH
Published: September 15, 2008
LEAD: Ten states from Maryland to Maine are about to undertake the nation’s most serious effort yet to tackle climate change, putting limits on carbon dioxide emissions from utilities and making them pay for each ton of pollutants.
Critique: This lead is not my favorite. It just throws me off with the mention of ten states from Maryland to Maine. I wonder why the author didn’t just say the New England States, because the reader right off the bat starts wondering exactly which states the article is talking about. If the author had just included the actual names of the companies that they will be charging, then it would be more informational. The lead entails valuable information pertaining to the topic, but it could be reworded for a clearer understanding to keep the reader’s attention.
New York Times
Obama Plans Sharper Tone as Party Frets
By ADAM NAGOURNEY and JEFF ZELENY
Published: September 11, 2008
LEAD: Senator Barack Obama will intensify his assault against Senator John McCain, with new television advertisements and more forceful attacks by the candidate and surrogates beginning Friday morning, as he confronts an invigorated Republican presidential ticket and increasing nervousness in the Democratic ranks.
Critique: I like this lead because it is informative to the tee of what is going on right now in the election. It is not very attention grabbing, but it makes you want to know what Obama has instore for McCain therefore you will keep reading. This lead maintains structure and importance of the story. The lead is like a headlining update on the election.
Commercial Appeal
Memphis City Schools teachers may seek 4-day week
Efficiency is given as one reason; change in state law would have to occur
By Jane Roberts (Contact), Memphis Commercial AppealWednesday, September 17, 2008
LEAD: Teachers in Memphis City Schools are expected to ask for a four-day week in their union negotiations this year, setting up the scenario that could change tens of thousands of daily lives as early as next fall.
Critique: I like this story! The lead is informative and really good. It definitely uses the news values and answers the 5 Ws. It really gives a good brief synopsis of what the rest of the story is about. This is also an issue that could affect the whole Memphis area, so the author made sure to make this lead’s tone effective in including this fact. The author made the lead sound urgent and debatable giving it an open end to the rest of the story and for future stories.
Abortion issue again Dividing Catholic Church
By DAVID D. KIRKPATRICK
Published: September 16, 2008
LEAD: SCRANTON, Pa. — Until recently, Matthew Figured, a Sunday school teacher at the Holy Rosary Roman Catholic Church here, could not decide which candidate to vote for in the presidential election.
Critique: I like this lead. The title already tells us what the story is about, and the information found in the first lead allows us to become more personal with an issue because it includes a specific person but does not forget to mention the fact this is an essential part of the upcoming presidential election. This lead makes one want to ask the question of maybe who he or she should vote for because it introduces information about different politicians and their beliefs on abortion. One can really follow this article well because of the lead. As the story goes on, one thing after another just falls in place.
New York Times
Crews From 31 States in Texas to Restore Power
By JAMES C. MCKINLEY JR
Published: September 16, 2008
LEAD: HOUSTON — An army of line crews from 31 states has converged on eastern Texas to help deal with the largest power failure in this large state’s history.
Critique: This lead is definitely a hard lead because the way it begins. Its exciting! I like it very much! This is a lead that I could read and hear in my head at the same time which makes the story that much more interesting. It uses the noun army which refers to a large organized group on a mission. This just makes the reader want to know more. The small bit of important information placed in this lead is impactful. It almost makes me feel as though I’m a part of what is going on. Stories like this one are definitely not something that your average person might want to be a part of, but I really find it interesting how something so massive can occur and the rest of the world almost misses it if it weren’t for the news. I want to be there!!!
New York Times
States Aim to Cut Gases by Making Polluters Pay
By FELICITY BARRINGER and KATE GALBRAITH
Published: September 15, 2008
LEAD: Ten states from Maryland to Maine are about to undertake the nation’s most serious effort yet to tackle climate change, putting limits on carbon dioxide emissions from utilities and making them pay for each ton of pollutants.
Critique: This lead is not my favorite. It just throws me off with the mention of ten states from Maryland to Maine. I wonder why the author didn’t just say the New England States, because the reader right off the bat starts wondering exactly which states the article is talking about. If the author had just included the actual names of the companies that they will be charging, then it would be more informational. The lead entails valuable information pertaining to the topic, but it could be reworded for a clearer understanding to keep the reader’s attention.
New York Times
Obama Plans Sharper Tone as Party Frets
By ADAM NAGOURNEY and JEFF ZELENY
Published: September 11, 2008
LEAD: Senator Barack Obama will intensify his assault against Senator John McCain, with new television advertisements and more forceful attacks by the candidate and surrogates beginning Friday morning, as he confronts an invigorated Republican presidential ticket and increasing nervousness in the Democratic ranks.
Critique: I like this lead because it is informative to the tee of what is going on right now in the election. It is not very attention grabbing, but it makes you want to know what Obama has instore for McCain therefore you will keep reading. This lead maintains structure and importance of the story. The lead is like a headlining update on the election.
Commercial Appeal
Memphis City Schools teachers may seek 4-day week
Efficiency is given as one reason; change in state law would have to occur
By Jane Roberts (Contact), Memphis Commercial AppealWednesday, September 17, 2008
LEAD: Teachers in Memphis City Schools are expected to ask for a four-day week in their union negotiations this year, setting up the scenario that could change tens of thousands of daily lives as early as next fall.
Critique: I like this story! The lead is informative and really good. It definitely uses the news values and answers the 5 Ws. It really gives a good brief synopsis of what the rest of the story is about. This is also an issue that could affect the whole Memphis area, so the author made sure to make this lead’s tone effective in including this fact. The author made the lead sound urgent and debatable giving it an open end to the rest of the story and for future stories.
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